I run with the kite in the field
All the stars shining brightly
The clear, moon-filled sky's expanse stretches wide
String trailing behind me
The kite lifts as I tug and pull
A sharp jerk, I don't let it go
Now, it's soaring high
I let out more cord as it sails
Above the ground, a sky ship
Colorful in day, by night delicate
Muted greys swerve and dip
Yellow tails flutter from the bow
As I slowly release more rope
How far can it fly?
Morning star on the horizon
Near where the sun will be rising
Dawn will soon arrive
I remove small silver scissors
Which glint in the twilight
Setting the spool of coil onto the ground
I look at the kite
Kneeling down on my knees
I snip the rope and release
"Lord, send my prayers to him please"
The kite, now free, rushes away
My letter tied up with it sways
With all of my hopes
Every single word I could say
I lay my head down on cool grass
To find peace at last
All the stars shining brightly
The clear, moon-filled sky's expanse stretches wide
String trailing behind me
The kite lifts as I tug and pull
A sharp jerk, I don't let it go
Now, it's soaring high
I let out more cord as it sails
Above the ground, a sky ship
Colorful in day, by night delicate
Muted greys swerve and dip
Yellow tails flutter from the bow
As I slowly release more rope
How far can it fly?
Morning star on the horizon
Near where the sun will be rising
Dawn will soon arrive
I remove small silver scissors
Which glint in the twilight
Setting the spool of coil onto the ground
I look at the kite
Kneeling down on my knees
I snip the rope and release
"Lord, send my prayers to him please"
The kite, now free, rushes away
My letter tied up with it sways
With all of my hopes
Every single word I could say
I lay my head down on cool grass
To find peace at last
Comments
Whereas, while I was re-reading it with the song in mind, the poem became very different; probably because I was thinking of the syllable pattern it was modeled after.
I listen that song every morning. There is nothing quite like hearing those lyrics while watching the stars disappear into the pale light of dawn.
Thanks for the comment on the poem. The syllable pattern was a challenge to do. I was going to try "Silver and Cold" next, but that just isn't working out at all. I can't seem to get the right mood or idea on where to go with a poem for that one.
I've always found it interesting how Davey said he became move open with his lyrics as time when on, when it's exactly opposite. His lyrics morphed into vague metaphors, strung together ever so artfully. Well, at least that's my opinion.
What's especially strange is that the sins seem to be both another person's that he'll take into himself as well as his own he is asking for forgiveness. The only scenario this reminds me of is the book "Crime and Punishment" where the main character Raskolnikov meets Sonya who is a prostitute. He's committed the crime of murder and he is entirely full of sin and culpable, but he befriends Sonya and falls in love with her, taking her sins away from her by the act, and she in turn saves him by accepting his confession of murder and forgiving him.
Though, I do think the video does go with the words to some extent. I always viewed Silver and Cold as the song of profound and unfathomable adoration, love, or even friendship. The subject of the song proclaims he will love that person no matter what-- "your sins into me." Of course, this only begins the spiral downward.
The song can speak in two meanings; it has a dual-perspective. In one sense, it's about loving someone no matter what. On the other hand, their sins can begin to begin to drag you down as well, or vice versa.
Depending on how you believe the video ended, Davey's "sins" killed them all.
And of course, there are the lyrical comparisons between 37mm, and Silver and Cold. Though, Decemberunderground's lyrics were extremely detached and unfeeling compared to Sing the Sorrow's 'devastation, and desperation.'
Maybe, I'll try a Blaqk Audio song instead at some point. I need to go back to using some freeform or standard patterns for awhile, since I've tried this a few times already. I don't like to bore myself doing repetitious stylistic work haha